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雅思大作文范文:老人退休后给自己花钱而不存钱

2022-07-12 10:58:01来源:新东方在线雅思 柯林斯词典

新东方在线雅思为同学们整理了雅思大作文范文之老人退休后给自己花钱而不存钱,供考生参考学习。

雅思大作文题目:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Older people after retirement choose to spend money for themselves (e.g. holiday) rather than saving money for their children.

Is it a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

【话题分类】

社会类

【题目解析】

题目大意:老人退休后选择给自己花钱而不是为他们的孩子存钱。

题目要求考生回答“该现象的是积极发展还是消极发展”。

这个题目可以有两种观点1)完全赞同积极/消极,2)大部分赞同积极/消极。

本文笔者选择的观点是“完全赞同是积极发展”,因为1)老年人可以享受晚年生活,2)他们的孩子可以变得更独立。

【写作思路】

Para 1 = 题目改写 + 个人观点(完全积极)

Para 2 = 支持理由1

Para 3 = 支持理由2

Para 4 = 重申观点 + 总结主体2个段中的理由

【参考范文】

Many retired people prefer to use their savings and pensions merely to suit their own needs by participating in a wide range of activities, such as taking holidays, instead of making deposits for their offspring. Personally, I strongly believe this is beneficial because it allows the elderly to enjoy their later years and helps their children to be more independent.

The primary reason supporting my stance is that old people can feel happier about their life after retirement. Many elderly people could not do what they expected to do when they were young because of work and family commitments, but now they can achieve their dreams with the money they have saved. For example, while some can take holidays domestically and internationally to taste multifarious cuisines and see splendid scenery in person, others can enrol themselves in a university course to gain a degree. If they saved money for their children, these would not happen.

Another important point I consider relevant is that adult children can be encouraged to be more independent. In some parts of the globe, especially in Asian countries, many old people endeavour to save money to support their children purchasing properties and even to rear their grandchildren, resulting in a fact that their adult children may become too idle to work diligently to achieve success in life and work. In contrast, when financial assistance is withdrawn by their old parents, these adults will feel the pressure to make money.

In conclusion, I completely agree that there are positive outcomes if old people spend money on recreational activities for themselves only, instead of saving up for their adult children. After all, not only can senior citizens be provided with abundant opportunities to do whatever they intend to do, but also their children will learn to be more independent.

【亮点词汇及短语】

1.retired people 退休人员

2.prefer to 宁愿做某事

3.savings (n.) 存款

4.pension (n.) 退休金

5.suit one’s own needs 满足某人的要求

6.participate in 参与

7.a wide range of 各种各样的

8.taking holidays 度假

9.make deposits for 为…存款

10.offspring (n.) 后代

11.later years 晚年

12.independent (adj.) 独立的

13.retirement (n.) 退休

14.elderly people 老年人

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